tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5349472.post6314799658718004191..comments2024-03-12T13:36:14.856-07:00Comments on mole: Roof, Part IIDalehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14523194846272870013noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5349472.post-32526288896936984552012-04-16T13:09:09.396-07:002012-04-16T13:09:09.396-07:00I'm struggling more with the idea of flying fr...I'm struggling more with the idea of flying fruitFire Birdhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13518190677399410354noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5349472.post-85789489638253544322012-02-08T08:05:02.061-08:002012-02-08T08:05:02.061-08:00Hey, I missed it at first, and I wrote it :-)Hey, I missed it at first, and I wrote it :-)Dalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14523194846272870013noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5349472.post-65165036560494821502012-02-08T05:11:40.598-08:002012-02-08T05:11:40.598-08:00I cannot believe I missed the innuendo. ::facepalm...I cannot believe I missed the innuendo. ::facepalm:: <br /><br />You're all wonderful.rbarenblathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10882606147795083729noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5349472.post-86347610329473292532012-02-08T05:11:16.950-08:002012-02-08T05:11:16.950-08:00Indeed, Dale! Just could not resist...
O silly m...Indeed, Dale! Just could not resist...<br /><br />O silly me!Marly Youmanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02377938366750387442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5349472.post-687406900370408092012-02-07T19:40:34.717-08:002012-02-07T19:40:34.717-08:00Haha! Still laughing about Marly's comment. Th...Haha! Still laughing about Marly's comment. The heft and the sway of the hammer resonate w/me. Reminds me of summers helping Dad with one construction project or another.<br /><br />Yes, hammer away. :)Jaynehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06694559900539722616noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5349472.post-90311266473098326202012-02-07T19:21:31.258-08:002012-02-07T19:21:31.258-08:00Well, now, I could say the same sort of thing abou...Well, now, I could say the same sort of thing about that last comment, couldn't I? :-)Dalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14523194846272870013noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5349472.post-66042832696385775322012-02-07T17:28:33.311-08:002012-02-07T17:28:33.311-08:00Dale,
Well, a bit! You'll have to think about...Dale,<br /><br />Well, a bit! You'll have to think about whether you want that to poke its head up or not!Marly Youmanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02377938366750387442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5349472.post-18660904888995868682012-02-07T15:22:14.489-08:002012-02-07T15:22:14.489-08:00i wanted to highlight the same bits as rachel and ...i wanted to highlight the same bits as rachel and this: <br /><br />I would take back only one thing. I said / I would never be happy, and that's true enough,/ but I said it in bitterness, as if it were your fault.<br /><br />the line breaks in this are wonderful. xocaroleehttp://caroleesherwood.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5349472.post-86397248712359495072012-02-07T15:20:16.577-08:002012-02-07T15:20:16.577-08:00Your poetry is the only stuff that reaches in and ...Your poetry is the only stuff that reaches in and strokes my heart to make it quiver and tingle.Zhoenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03515663141425057088noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5349472.post-41002011907159018972012-02-07T13:58:49.979-08:002012-02-07T13:58:49.979-08:00Yes, I saw that secondary image, and it made me la...Yes, I saw that secondary image, and it made me laugh, & I kept it deliberately, but maybe it derails the end of the poem :-)Dalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14523194846272870013noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5349472.post-33031319542517814172012-02-07T13:45:12.128-08:002012-02-07T13:45:12.128-08:00I like this, Dale (though please forgive if maybe ...I like this, Dale (though please forgive if maybe I have a little teeny difficulty with the end as I picture the warm fruit beating in your hand in a way you do not mean. If mine, I would tweak that a tiny bit.) <br /><br />But I particularly like the whole tone of the poem and the way you've marshaled the pauses in the first stanza.Marly Youmanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02377938366750387442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5349472.post-40352717900174134632012-02-07T11:22:38.287-08:002012-02-07T11:22:38.287-08:00{{{you}}}
This is beautiful. I love "Who bet...{{{you}}}<br /><br />This is beautiful. I love "Who better / to detect the small motions of intimacy" and "across / the long green surge of water, the treachery / of cold pilings gulping, the uncertain sky[.]" And "it was only / ever love." Yes. Yes.rbarenblathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10882606147795083729noreply@blogger.com